Erasure Poetry

Our Lost Jungle challenges us to randomly
take a slice of writing and erase bits of it to create
something new. Erasure poetry is just what it sounds like
and can be quite liberating.

My son had been reading Romeo and Juliet for school
and since that was the closest thing to me, I opened to the first page. I didn’t quite create a new theme, but it was interesting to see what Shakespeare might be like condensed into a free form.

ACT I

PROLOGUE

Two households, both alike in dignity,
In fair Verona, where we lay our scene,

From ancient grudge break to new mutiny,
Where civil blood makes civil hands unclean.
From forth the fatal loins of these two foes
A pair of star-cross’d lovers take their life;
Whose misadventured piteous overthrows
Do with their
death bury their parents’ strife.
The fearful passage of their death-mark’d love,

And the continuance of their parents’ rage,
Which, but their children‘s end, nought could remove,
Is now the two hours’ traffic of our stage;
The which if you with patient ears attend,
What here shall miss, our
toil shall strive to mend.

 

My erased version: Shake/Speared love

In dignity
we lay ancient
blood unclean
Two lovers
life
death
strife
love of rage
which children toil
to mend.

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6 thoughts on “Erasure Poetry

  1. You certainly succeeded in liberating some powerful language into a tight little poem that really packs a punch!! Personally what I find interesting is “love of rage” as I wrote a song called “Life Without A Dream” which had a line “to love without the rage” !! Now I might have to go back and hack through a little Shakespeare myself for additional inspiration !! Well Done JL, I really enjoyed your erasure poem !!

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